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2017最新个人陈述写作技巧(附范文)

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        个人陈述时留学文书中的重要组成部分,主要用于描述个人的背景、申请目的、研究方向等信息,也是留学申请材料中较重要却也比较难把握的部分。当申请者苦恼于GRE、TOEFL等标准化考试的成绩,一份得体的个人陈述却有可能让你力挽狂澜,从众多申请者中脱颖而出。在某些学校,个人陈述已经代替了面试,作为评价学生的一个重要依据。下文我们分析了个人陈述的内容、格式与写作技巧,并选择了一篇优秀范文供同学们参考。
一、个人陈述的内容   
        1.申请者的学术或专业兴趣及背景;   
        2.欲研究的方向;   
        3.未来的职业目标。   
        要写出成功的申请文书仅仅有那些适用于任何类型写作的基本写作技巧(清晰、简洁)是远远不够的。一篇好的申请文书要求申请人能够用一种与其他申请人完全不同方式,巧妙地展现自己的独特个性和经验。   
二、个人陈述的格式   
        个人陈述的要求不同,但一般个人陈述都包括固定信息,可以遵循下面形式。   
        1.自我介绍   
        许多个人陈述都是开始于一段类似邮件的开头,可以采用很多方式增加阅读者对你的关注,比如你从何处了解这个申请的,有何人推荐,有什么人曾经是成功申请成功给你这个信息的,你认识哪位审阅委员会成员等,你所处的地位,你的职位或者学位,你在寻找什么职位或者学位,都要在第一段一目了然的写清楚。
        2.详细的支撑段落   
        后续段落应该直接回答任何申请要求的具体问题,结合你自己的长处,你自己的资格/位置,你的团队精神和认证,你的长远目标和过去经验等。每一个段落应该集中有一个主题句,只需要展示重点。每段都需要案例,每个案例都必须和你本人/申请要求有密切关系,无时无刻支持你有资格通过这个申请。   
       3.结论   
        在各种主题归集在一起,再强调一遍,并重申你对申请目标的兴趣,以及为什么有兴趣。
三、个人陈述的写作技巧
        1. 主题明确、主次分明
        即个人陈述结构清晰,读者能很轻易的找到文章主题。文章内容有主有次,叙述有轻有重,逻辑感很强。通过阅读文章,能让读者对你有一个很清晰的认识,感觉到你所说的优秀一面。
        2. 论证有力#p#分页标题#e#
        留学个人陈述不是简单的罗列自己的优秀品质,而是恰当的用example来论证,说服力强。能通过example展示出作者的优秀品质和综合能力,让读者信服。在写作过程中,要注意使用过渡。必须在段落中使用过渡,特别是要在段落之间使用过渡以保持整篇文章的逻辑流畅。过渡不限于象“as a result、while…、since…”等等这样的短语,还包括反复出现的关键词和主题的递进。过渡为树立论点提供了逻辑结构。也要整篇文章读起来很流畅。
        3. 内容应该包括6个why
        即为什么对这个专业感兴趣?
        为什么觉得这个专业在未来很重要?
        为什么选择这个学校?
        什么事情使你对这个专业的兴趣逐渐增加加深并且达到顶峰的?
        有没有一些具体的研究经历,研究项目吸引了你?
        你认为自己能给该研究领域带来什么样的价值?
        因为这几个问题直接关系到你的申请动机和研究能力,所以文章的内容至少要包括这几个问题的大部分。
        4. 文章独特、个性、新颖
        文章要有独特性,写出自己的特色。而不是照搬照抄别人的文章。
如果大家的ps具备上述四个特点,就是一篇优秀的留学个人陈述PS了。总之,根据自己的特点,构思,写出个性化的PS,吸引到教授,才称得上是一篇优秀的PS。这样你的留学申请通过率就会大大提高。
        四、个人陈述范文
 
        Personal Statement   
        Applied Program: Mechanical Engineering   
        In China there is an old custom called one-year anniversary fortune-telling: by the time the new born is one year old, its family prepares a lot of objects of different shapes and functions for it to choose from. The first object that attracts its eyes and hands is supposed to be a symbol of the baby’s future career. Unscientific as it is, it truly predicted my profession and future. At that time the toy car in my hand greatly aroused my wonder at the wheeled monster. As I grew up, I was no longer satisfied with collecting car pictures and making car models. I was determined to be an expert in automobile design and manufacturing. As it turned out, the specialized education I have received in both my undergraduate and graduate programs have fully equipped me for undertaking more ambitious academic tasks in the field of mechanical control. I know I am no genius and I also know that success is to result from extraordinary efforts. I chose as my starting point Beijing Institute of Technology, one of the 3 universities in China that majored in automobile research. There besides the specialty and theory studies, I made use of my free time to read large quantities of references both in Chinese and English, to catch up with the latest development in theory and to be immersed in the widest range of information. As a graduate, my academic performance had always ranked No.1 in my class, especially for the 20 also specialty courses in the junior and senior years, among which Automotive Manufacturing got full scores. For 4 years I got the first or the second class scholarships consecutively and was awarded many honors such as Outstanding Student, Outstanding Cadre, as well as appraised by the department leader as the best student in the recent 5 years.   #p#分页标题#e#
        The strong interests in automobile forever stimulated my enthusiasm in study and motivated me to equip myself with specialty knowledge to the greatest possible extent. Apart from the study task, I also served as teaching assistant in the course of vehicle electronic technology. As a post graduate and with the specialty knowledge getting more and more profound, I worked as a research assistant in the laboratory and came to better my ability to apply theory into practice, thus capable of carrying out scientific research activities independently. Meanwhile I took part in many research and development projects and accumulated rich experiences on that. In the joint-venture project between our school and the first automobile manufacturing plant in China, I was responsible for building up experimental framework composed of the electric motor, hydrostatic gearbox, loading device and the control system and carried out the functional adjusting of the automatic shift, thus getting a better knowledge of the power train. The experiment was a great success and provided reliable support for the overall vehicle experiment.
  The thesis for my master degree is Research of Loader with Automatic Shift Technology and Fuzzy Control Strategy. At present, China’s research on automation of construction machinery has not started yet. I choose this subject in order to realize automatic shift control and computerization of construction machinery. It is mainly concerned with coordination control of the engine and the gearbox, power distribution, recognition and fuzzy control of the working state of construction machinery and so on. This is based on the joint venture----the automatic shift control of ZL50 loader between our school and a gearbox manufacturing plant in Hunan. The purpose of this research project is to change the loader’s original manual shift into automatic shift control. The stumbling blocks here are the recognition of different working states, the coordination of the engine and the gearbox and the realization of the potential engine power to the greatest possible extent.   
        In that project I was responsible for the whole process from the project demonstration, program selection, simulation research and project implementation. We largely enhanced the automation level and working efficiency of ZL50 loader and made convenient its operation. At the same time I benefited a lot from a deeper understanding of the essence of automatic shift techniques.       
Apart from the completion of my graduation thesis and based on the experimental statistics and the project’s early stage work summary, I published, on the national central periodical named Construction Machinery, a paper titled Research on the Mechanical Parts of Electronically Controlled Automatic Shift on ZL50 Loader and also another paper, on Construction Machinery and Equipment, titled Research of ZL50 Loader with Electronic Controlled Automatic Shift System, which has the project outcome as its theoretic basis. They were highly praised by experts in this field for their values in academic research and of creativity. Because of the need to collect large quantities of experimental data for possible future renovation reference, I independently developed a set of data collecting soft ware, with the transmitter soft ware written in C language and the receiver soft ware written in VC++, communication between the two through series connections. This soft ware was highly usable throughout the whole experiment and greatly increased my work efficiency.   #p#分页标题#e#
        Automobile industry is the main industry for a country. It started very late in China and lags far behind the advanced countries such as the United States, Germany, Canada and others, its competency comparatively low. To shorten the distance, it is necessary to go abroad and learn from the developed countries the advanced automobile manufacturing technology and for that reason it is also urgent to perfect my knowledge structure and enhance my specialty level. The specialty of mechanical engineering in University of Michigan ranked No. 11 in the United States. It has rich technical resources and its research centers and laboratories are proud of state-of-the-art equipments. The research work of Vehicle Power train Dynamics and Control being carried out there by many famous professors well fits into my postgraduate research work. So I wish to continue my education in your university. A scrutiny of my educational background and of the research projects that I have performed will indicate that I have a solid foundation in mechanical control. Therefore, my knowledge and specialized trainings in mechanical control will also enable me to prove competent in control-related programs. If my qualifications suit me also for a program in mechanical control, do not hesitate to transfer me to such program because I am equally interested in those programs. My study plan is to learn the fundamental knowledge first and then, based on my own research background, decide on a research direction that will best facilitate the development of China’s automobile industry. In this way I will try to work out valuable academic achievements and write high-level doctorate thesis. Eventually I will return to China to contribute my learning to the development of automobile industry in my fatherland and thus realize the dreams of my childhood.
 
 
 
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